RH Page 61

Jordan - Panel one and three bother me only because the characters have trouble separating from the background. I really like the expressions you choose for the faces and the body language. As always, you use pretty good variety in your shots. The overhead shot is nicely done. Can't really tell what is in the last panel however and that is a problem. Only after close scrutiny did I see the hand clutching something. This should be a reveal shot - not a mystery. From a visual perspective, the reader needs to know what they are looking at in order to put the story together from the elements you provide. This is a hard storytelling puzzle to solve. Good page overall! RICK